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precious blind one
are you lost
can you not find your
way back home

while you're weeping
there in darkness
I am waiting
here alone

if I guide you
on your journey
if I take you
to the gates

and you find me
lost without you
ever locked
outside those gates

will you leave me
there in shadow
will you finally
aid your friend

wrap me in your
wings of fire
carry me on to
journey's end
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Written for the sole purpose of remembering a melody about a mythological creature who shall remain nameless.

I'm still not sure whether I like it, but "The Romantic" was getting so lonely in that poetry folder all by itself.
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~Sederous Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I enjoy this poem mainly because I tend to be huge on romanticism when I write. Sometimes, I don't even realize it! I loved the meter here, although it didn't seem to begin until the second stanza. :)
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~juniorel Mar 14, 2012   Writer
Thank you so much! :D
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~VicariouSoul Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
This poem's fluidity in what it has to say reminds me a lot of my poem
Mari - a magnum opus with but a small difference, it rhymes a lot (you might like).

However, this poem rhymes in a different way too in its simplistic rhythm
and I really love it because not everyone can make beauty out of simplicity so well.

The mythological creature sounds a lot like that of a Siren near the sea.
I too have written one or two works regarding a Siren. They're lovely,
but oh how misleading they can be in their beauty to lead one to their end.

You seem to have the potential to write even more nice poetry,
despite prose/short stories being more your thing.

Anyway, I would like to Feature this in our Group :iconpoetrys-renaissance:
and I have also added this to my Favorites as well.



Thank You for sharing you words!
Siryan
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~juniorel Mar 14, 2012   Writer
Thank you SO much for your kind words and the invitation to have my poem featured in your group. Your interpretation is definitely interesting.

I haven't had a chance to read through your poem yet, but I will be sure to do so. :D
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~VicariouSoul Mar 14, 2012  Professional Writer
That's alright, on your own time. I figured you might like it.

You're welcome! I'm glad my feedback was of interest to you.
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*Tom-MarvoloRiddle Feb 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I simply love it!
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~juniorel Feb 22, 2012   Writer
Oh, Tom Riddle, I knew you would! :tighthug:
But seriously, thank you very much.
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~SAASANTMTHEE Apr 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Great sentiment.
Good poem.
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~juniorel Apr 22, 2011   Writer
Thankee very much.
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(the red heart emote is not big enough!)
This is GORGEOUS. Wow! I love it!!!
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