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Mari - a magnum opus with but a small difference, it rhymes a lot (you might like).
However, this poem rhymes in a different way too in its simplistic rhythm
and I really love it because not everyone can make beauty out of simplicity so well.
The mythological creature sounds a lot like that of a Siren near the sea.
I too have written one or two works regarding a Siren. They're lovely,
but oh how misleading they can be in their beauty to lead one to their end.
You seem to have the potential to write even more nice poetry,
despite prose/short stories being more your thing.
Anyway, I would like to Feature this in our Group
and I have also added this to my Favorites as well.
Thank You for sharing you words!
Siryan
I haven't had a chance to read through your poem yet, but I will be sure to do so.
You're welcome! I'm glad my feedback was of interest to you.
But seriously, thank you very much.
Good poem.
(the red heart emote is not big enough!)
This is GORGEOUS. Wow! I love it!!!