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IV

I spend the rest of the evening in a pathetic daze. I don't even notice when Valentine gets called to the floor to be recognized as king. I do see the moment Esmeralda is crowned, though, and I see Phoebus asking her to dance right after. And I see her blush as he does.

My hands curl into fists, and I hide them in my pockets. I have never been one to lose my temper, but I can make no promises tonight. I wish there were some way for me to tear this entire building, this whole event, this vast social structure to the ground; drag Esmeralda from the rubble; and show her the blue sky instead. I would give her wings, raise her up, watch her fly.

Phoebus lifts her in his arms, tosses her just a little, and catches her again. She's such a tiny thing it's no feat for him. She keeps laughing as he mutters in her ear, spinning her around like the charismatic hero in some black-and-white romance. I look for Lily Darling, but she's not here. I wonder how Phoebus convinced her not to attend the dance. Was she sick? Did he make her sick? I wouldn't put it past him.

"Man, I wish I could dance half that well." Peter is at my shoulder, smiling as though all is right in the world, and—who am I kidding?—for him, it probably is. The only person with a problem here is me. Even Valentine is smiling, shuffling from the dance floor back to me with a face that practically glows. The students have not been so cruel as I predicted, and Valentine's ability to laugh at himself has only endeared him to them. Now he's less of a loner. Now he's less dependent on me.

I wonder why this bothers me. Maybe because we're taught from our infancy that it's what's on the inside that counts. Looks don't matter, which is an outright lie. But I can see some truth in the idea now. Valentine could be loved, even though he's ugly, because his heart is high quality. His heart, as I saw the moment I met him, is made of indestructible stuff. Bury it in slop and you can dig it out later, shine it, and watch it sparkle just as it had before you abused it. Mine, on the other hand, is far more organic than his and far, far older. It's been rotting for years. Moldy, putrid, disgusting. If anyone ever managed to touch it, it would disintegrate.

And Esmeralda has come dangerously close.
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Much of the first part of Notre-Dame de Paris follows Pierre, Quasimodo, and Esmeralda. Claude is a bit mysterious until later in the story. Because of this, I have had some fun rearranging scenes here and there, or adding a few in order to better show Claude's relationship to the people around him. This is one of those moments. I wanted to show, a little earlier on, his deep-seated envy for the people all around him, those who live their lives with ease. And I wanted to show his simultaneous love and envy of Valentine/Quasimodo because I feel it is an important part of his experience.

Fun Fact: Hugo's Phoebus was engaged to a girl named Fleur-de-Lys. But because she came from high society and he was a military man, he always was always uncomfortable around her. His infatuation with Esmeralda came, primarily, from his need to escape his own feelings of inferiority.
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so well written the writing is secondary to the story that emerges. i guess i'll have to read the earlier posts.
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~juniorel May 20, 2012   Writer
That's the best compliment ever. Thank you so much. It takes a lot of work to make the writing invisible, and I'm so glad to learn some of that work payed off. :dance:
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Mood: Joy ~Molybdenum-Blues Mar 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, I love this so much! It's so wonderful, how deeply you've thought about the novel and how you are both staying true to the heart of the original and making it your own.

But ugh, every time I reach the end of a chapter, it's like... "MOAR!!!"
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~juniorel Mar 30, 2012   Writer
Thank you! :love: Your appreciation is so very appreciated!
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~Magnius159 Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:love:
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~juniorel Mar 28, 2012   Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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~Magnius159 Mar 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I hate your ability to write so well.

I can't wait to read the next chapter :D
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~juniorel Mar 28, 2012   Writer
Awww! :blush:
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~Janoera Mar 28, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I like your description of Valentine's heart as compared to Claude's. But I really doubt whether Frollo would really feel that way about Quasimodo in the novel though. I always thought Frollo was like a condescending and somewhat spiteful parent when it comes to Quasimodo, the kind that goes, "its for your own good". Hmmm... can't wait to read on:D
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~juniorel Mar 28, 2012   Writer
Uhh… This comment is going to be long. Sorry! Please don't feel obliged to read it, if you don't want to. It was just a lot of fun for me to write.

So, yeah. Frollo's feelings toward Quasimodo are never blatantly spelled out. Your interpretation is good, and I think most retellings agree with it (after all, Frollo failed to be there for Quasimodo at the pillory). But I interpreted their relationship differently for a few reasons. I hope you don't mind if I share them. Character analysis is my addiction! :lol: And I spent so many hours dissecting this character, so it's fun to finally be able to share all my ideas about him. Ahem…

Why I Think Claude was a Loving Parent

1. Claude's softness with his brother. Jean is described as Claude's spoiled child. You can see, whenever they get together, how Claude tries to be strict with him, but always ends up giving in. Bad habits like that are difficult to break, so I imagine Claude being soft with Quasimodo, too—especially considering how Quasimodo reminded him so strongly of his beloved little brother.

2. Educating Quasimodo. It would have been a challenge for one man to educate Quasimodo, who would likely never function in a society that feared him. I think a cruel parent wouldn't have bothered with it. But Claude spent hours upon hours teaching him to read and write. He gave him a job (one Quasimodo truly loved), and when Quasimodo went deaf, the two of them developed a sign language so they could communicate. To me, that speaks of a very close relationship.

3. Quasimodo's temper and behavior around Claude. Although loyal to a fault, Quasimodo was not a person who allowed himself to be stepped on by just anyone. He is described as having a violent, powerful temper with those who mistreated him. But for the two people who showed him kindness (Esmeralda and Claude), he was like a puppy dog. Claude must have shown him great kindness for him to be as loyal as he was.

4. Jealousy of Quasimodo. This is where I get the idea that Claude was not only close to Quasimodo, but may also have had a great deal of respect for him. He honestly believed Esmeralda could fall for Quasimodo. There's a line about Frollo in the beginning of the Disney version… I think it's something like, "He saw corruption everywhere except within." But I think it was just the opposite with this character. He believed Esmeralda was a better, more mature person than she was. He believed Pierre was kinder and more loving than he was. He saw potential for his brother's redemption. And he believed Quasimodo capable of obtaining a love he himself could only dream of. To me, Claude's great downfall was not that he was evil and didn't know it; but that, deep down, he believed himself to be evil and had no one to tell him differently.
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