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October 31, 2012
My Brother's Blood by ~juniorel Suggester Writes: It sent thrills down my spine, and what's great about it is that it doesn't even seem that creepy at first, it just seemed like a story about a delusional man.
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I wrote this short story some time ago and presented it to a critique group. They informed me it was solid, except the ending was a little cliché. Now that I've seen certain films (I'll neglect to name them for the sake of avoiding spoilers), I think they were probably right. It was still a fun piece to work on, though.


Edit: A DD! Holy… I woke up all bleary-eyed, saw all those feedback messages, and assumed it had to be a glitch or something. Thank you so much!
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Creepy and a little sad. I don't mind that the ending was predictable. The very last sentence is particularly chilling.

One minor thing, though: "Avoid Grace Park this week, it read." I don't think those last two words are meant to be part of the newpaper article, but the format makes them look as though they are.